Journal #6

By the feedback I got when we exchanged papers, I was able to figure out what to revise. I got good feedback that helped me decide my revision process. When I revised my paper, I changed a lot of the narration in order to make it fit Hurston's narration style. I revised my dialogues. I revised the syntax and the flow of the paragraph. I also removed some things that didn't seem to fit the pastiche and I added things to make the pastiche have a better idea of where it is going on. I think my revisions made the pastiche better than the first way it was written and made it have a better fit into Hurston's style, but more feedback will assure me that I am heading towards the right direction.